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He will tell you stories…
Of how he was fooled…
How she seduced him…
With eyes made of jewels…
Spinning words of poetry…
Speaking in tongues…
Seductive and emotional…
Breathing lust into his lungs…
He will tell you stories…
Of her wit and her charm…
That caught him off-guard…
And disabled his alarm…
Bringing down his walls…
Allowing the beast in…
Infecting his dreams…
With darkness and sin…
He will tell you stories…
Of how deeply he fell…
For a make believe world…
That became a living Hell…
Craving her company…
Obsessed with her life…
Painting vivid pictures…
In his mind at night…
He will tell you stories…
Of dark hotel rooms…
An alternate double life…
That lifted his gloom…
Breaking the monotony…
Of each draining day…
And stolen moments…
Held under her sway…
And he’ll tell you stories…
Of how she changed…
Of how it all ended…
Becoming estranged…
Which left him so empty…
A black hole in his life…
And how he responded…
With anger and a knife…
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Eye Will Not Cry 
Beautifully written and so poignant. 🙂
Thank you for your kind words – Cheers J
anger and a knife…well written thought a little frightening 🙂
I tried to give the image of a killer on death row – which is a little frightening – hope you liked – Cheers J
very much!
Wow! It is the elegant rhyming of poets like you who are making me appreciate rhyming poetry again. I normally only like it in formed poetry, but wow… your writing and rhyme are so beat on that I cannot help but fall in love with your words! The ending is absolutely brilliant!
Thank you so much for your comment – really appreciate it – I have tried writing other forms of poetry but always come back to rhymes – even though I know from looking at poetry forums it is frowned upon – but it’s what I do – so really happy you connected with it – Cheers J
I think it is frowned upon because so many poets don’t know the real purpose of rhyming. They think if they just rhyme two words together, regardless of how the lines connect, then they’ve produced a rhyming poem and call it poetry… you don’t do that, at least not from what I’ve read so far of your work… you really dig deep into the meaning of the lines and the rhymes and it shows your careful attention. And that’s why I respect you as a rhyming poet 🙂
Thank you – your words are quite humbling – I love what I do and whilst it’s on the darker side, I hope people “feel” that coming through. Cheers J
I write a lot of dark poetry too, perhaps that is why I clicked so well… but yes, I can tell you love writing poetry 🙂
Thank you! Will be over to check you out soon – feel free to submit for a guest poet slot sometime – just drop your words to eyewillnotcry@hotmail.co.uk – Cheers J
Thanks J 🙂 I will see if I can dig something up to submit… and thanks in advance for stopping by 🙂
That’s tragic…
But nicely written 👍🏻 🙂
Thank you – Cheers J
true poetry
Not sure the experts would agree – but thank you! Cheers J
Sounds like patriarchy to the Nth degree!
You are determined to throw me with words I don’t use ! Wiki has a definition of patriarchy – was this what you meant Keith? http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Patriarchy Cheers J
Yep.
beautiful. made me sigh. made me think. i put on repeat. look out for a writing called ‘A room in black & white.’ later in the week. this song got me writing. cheers. i think. 🙂 😛
So glad you connected with this – I would love you to submit your work for a Guest Poet slot if you are willing? Just email me your words to eyewillnotcry@hotmail.co.uk – Cheers J
thanks very much. 🙂 i will have to come up with something just for you then. 🙂 i’ll have a think 🙂 🙂 thanks & grins 🙂
I hear a song J…beautiful, sad, poetic…lyrics.. (loved your pairing with Cave’s song but this poem is outstanding on it’s own right) xx -alex
Thanks Alex – hopefully it is the desparate song of a man on Death Row – that was the angle – and yes, Cave is brilliant – saw him in London at the weekend – mindblowing! Cheers J
A vividly engrossing piece indeed.
Thank you for your kind words – Cheers J
Reblogged this on Sirs Gone Girl and commented:
Love your work as always. I know someone who would say this of me.
Thank you for your continued support and kind words! Cheers J
Wow, this is amazing!
Thanks Phen – really appreciate your kind words – Cheers J
Of how he responded with anger and a knife
That came out of nowhere! Love it though, haha… I am so weird for loving this dark and twisted stuff 😛
Does that make me weird for writing it 😉 – Cheers J
Naah ^^”
anger and a knife? that’s so cruel J …..how about kisses and hugs xxx 🙂
Not sure you would end up on death row for kisses and hugs? Nice thought though! Cheers J
yes I am already as you noticed lol,
I couldn’t help but read it…the whole lines appeared as though someone was speaking everything I did in the dark before Jesus got hold of me….This is great!
Thank you for your insightful comment and kind words – Cheers J
Hi eyewillnotcry. How often has this scenario been played out? Creating misery and pain! Thank you for liking my poem Control Tower! Best Wishes. The Foureyed Poet.
You are welcome and thanks for taking the time to comment – Cheers J