Warning: not for the faint hearted…
Fluency just went for raw agression for “His” side of the story in the poetry challenge – a man on the edge that finally snaps!
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Cheers
J
“You fucking bitch, do you know how much I suffer?
From this torment of gold,
a popularity contest between colleagues,
a puppet show by big hands.
You fucking bitch, do you know how much I toil,
To put bread in your hole
that only spouts nonsense
and shit fit for a king?
Have you any regard for what I feel?
When I see that meat in your hole,
of the bastard who dares to lay claim to my possession,
to my love.
You fucking whore.
Don’t plead me with those filthy eyes,
Or I’ll slap your ass sore the way that bastard did.
I’m tired of dancing,
of waltzing to your annoying whines.
So for the last fucking time, listen to me shout,
And go fuck yourself.”
I love how the message is not very positive when the beat is really upbeat with a catchy rhythm.
It was a fitting contrast! Cheers J
Holy ! This gave me the chills, thank God I´m not sleeping alone tonight….I think.
Haha – thanks for stopping by to comment Charly – Sleep well! Cheers J
Wow! so incredible and full of the whole story…Men do feel the same as us. There is lots in this piece
It really is a powerful piece and so very raw! Cheers J
Thanks for posting it J, I’m really glad to see that others like the piece! 🙂
P.S. I was really curious what song you’d pick for this, was really surprised when I saw what you chose, but I have to say it is a good fit haha!
No worrries and thank you for partaking – it is always difficult adding songs to others work as music is so subjective – I have to judge whether to complement the words or contrast them – in your case, the words pretty much stand up for themselves, so a contrast seemed appropriate – glad you approve! Cheers J
I understand, it’s hard enough for me to put a song to my own work unless they were directly based on it, so it’s amazing that you’re able to put a song to all your work. Thank you for making this really fun challenge! 🙂
Thank you too! Cheers J
Love this anger!
Powerful isn’t it! Cheers J
It sure is!
Oh my good God, this is fucking spectacular! Love, love, love it!
Isn’t it just!! Cheers J
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