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She can’t keep opening her veins…
Just for your entertainment…
She’s not a puppet on a string…
To be left out on the pavement…
She can’t keep on playing…
All your stupid fucking games…
Listening to you calling her…
By a hundred different names…
She’s worn out by your insensitivity…
And sick of your disregard…
For the fact she bruises so easily…
Each time she lets down her guard…
You simply take her for granted…
And treat her like such a fool…
You never give her any credit…
It’s like she’s back at school…
She’s not sure she can take this…
And not sure she can carry on…
You’ve ripped the heart from her…
Without caring what you’ve done…
Because you’re so wrapped up…
In your quest for domination…
Walking over other people…
And crushing any inspiration…
Sucking up helpless souls…
Before casually spitting them out…
Not hearing their pleas…
Ignoring their desperate shouts…
And treating those close to you…
With such utter contempt…
That it becomes impossible…
To make any realistic attempt…
In keeping up the pretence…
At hiding her hatred and distain…
Because all it is doing…
Is causing her anguish and pain…
As you’ve had the best of her…
She’s been your entertainment…
So now it’s time for her to leave…
And free her heart from this torment…
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Eye Will Not Cry 
Nice one.
It’d be nice to read a reply though!
Thanks – reply as in from his perspective you mean or have you sent me a message? Cheers J
From his perspective.
I might write an amazing poem worth featuring though so may I have your email?
You have inspired an idea for a challenge – go for it – email words, photo and youtube clip to eyewillnotcry@hotmail.co.uk – Cheers J
I love that song. Nicely done.
Thank you for your kind words – Cheers J
Reblogged this on Alex'sOpinion Blog and commented:
I love this poem, is awesome!!!!
Thank you for the reblog – much appreciated – Cheers J
Well done!
Thanks again – Cheers J
Loved it.
Thank you KG! Cheers J
J, your words here are wonderful, filled with such strong emotions. I like that the narrator seems to be saying, “enough is enough” confronting the “him”, giving voice to the situation, a saving grace, a protector so to speak. At least this is my take on your words. “Better Man” is the perfect song, you just took it so much further, fantastic. Always a pleasure to read your work. Please take good care.
Warm wishes,
Pepper
Thanks Pepper – insightful as ever – Knowing how this one started, an finding the comments really useful
– was originally a first person voice – before 2 other versions – this worked best with an amazing song! Cheers J
Lovely poem! Really good that the girls finally breaks free ^^ But as hrh7 mentioned, I really love to know his side of the story too!
Thank you 🙂 And I encourage you to write his side – challenge coming up soon 🙂 – Cheers J
I’ll definitely try! 🙂
🙂
I just loved this one J, I took it all in. Of course, I can’t even read this from another angle, as it was if was written for me. Are you in my head, too? haha!
No, Excellent. To me it tells the story of a woman who has been controlled, abused, and bruised too long in many ways…schooled like a child by a man she thinks she deserves no better than. The song, one I have listened to many times over the years, was just so excellent with this. Almost like will she really leave? There was really only one line at the end that she would. Almost a question to herself. But see that is me reading it…what I so love about your words. To another it could be so powerful the other way. A freedom poem without doubt. So, so good. As always, -CC
Thank you CC for such an insightful and indepth comment – and yes, the song nails it – really drives my thoughts through – does she leave, will she leave, should she leave, could she leave? – who knows… my first ever Poetry Challenge coming up for “his” side of the story, will be interested to read your thoughts if I get many through – or even your own version…. Cheers J
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I hope she gains the strength to realize that she is in control of her own happiness.
Thank you for stopping to comment – Cheers J