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What are you doing…
Is this a fucking trick…
His legs feel weak…
His stomach feels sick…
This can’t be happening…
He knows this song…
He’s heard it before…
It all went so wrong…
And took some time…
To remove from his head…
Extract all the images…
Of you in his bed…
Laid naked and willing…
Wanting so much more…
Turning him into…
Such a sinful whore…
Living a half-life…
That tore into his soul…
As he lost his sanity…
And all fucking control…
Whilst risking it all…
To be lost in your eyes…
And in his madness…
He fell from the skies…
But always landed…
In a field full of hurt…
Where your callous remarks…
Pushed his face in the dirt….
Destroying his mind…
And driving him insane…
He thought it was over…
But here you are again…
Exploiting his weaknesses…
Making him come undone…
As you speak those words…
With the Devil’s tongue…
And he can’t stop himself…
Falling for your trick…
As you remove his walls…
Brick by fucking brick…
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Eye Will Not Cry 
As always, your ending phrases are superb. You build up such a strong story and then finish it off with my favorite swear word – making the whole piece a joy to read.
Thanks Rose – my favorite swear word too – as you may have noticed!! Cheers J
WOW, love this, very nice
Thank you for your kind words – Cheers J
Your amazing!
Now you make me blush! Thank you! Cheers J
Confusion..? Great song 🙂
Conflicting emotions perhaps 😉 – Cheers J
Reblogged this on Refractory Ramblings from the Darkside and commented:
Everyone deserves to treat themselves to the experience of this blog at least once, and prepare to have every sense stimulated. J has created a masterpiece.
I am in love with this one, the combination of the back and forth insight of the love/hate/lust of the man, and the wicked lust/contempt of the woman paired with williams’ song…love! Reblogged at ccchanel41.wordpress.com with comment “Everyone deserves to treat themselves to the experience of this blog at least once, and prepare to have every sense stimulated. J has created a masterpiece.”
Thank you for so many compliments, you really humble me – I love this song, wanted to use it for ages! Thanks for the re:blog – much appreciated – Cheers J
Wow! Such anger and hurt. Poor persona.
Thank you – I tired to mix the emotion in this one! Cheers J
Wow! Oh wow! Oh my flipping wow! Yep I liked this one a lot 😉
Hugs
Sal xx
I sense….. You like 😉 Cheers J
Hell yes!
Hugs
Sal xx
Reblogged this on THE PAST can BITE me and commented:
Once again an amazing and beautiful piece which always connect to my heart and stir emotions. Thank you once again
Thank you for your kind words and re:blog – Cheers J
Very beautiful
Thank you Jade – Cheers J
Somehow your words work very well with this song, even though there’s some contrast as well… Really like it! 🙂
I liked the thought of hesitant and confused words clashing with the direct message in the song – Cheers J
You are strong in your phrases…excellent!
Thank you Johann – hope to see you again – Cheers J
Your poems have such intense feelings, insight and raw emotion, I just love reading them
There are a lot to get through – grab a cuppa and take your time ! Enjoy – Cheers J