“A flowing river of illusion, running with confusion”…

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Messages mixed and muddy…
Barbed, sharp and bloody…

With tiny poisoned arrows…
Hiding deep dark sorrows…

With jet Black undertones…
Weighed down by a Thousand stones…
Whilst sat on moral high ground thrones…

Fired from upon high…
Into the cold night sky…
Aimed right between the eyes…

Words to provoke a reaction…
A fire burning for interaction…

And a fight…
Right here, right now, tonight…

Sprinkled with unwritten meanings…
Laced with unspoken feelings…

Intent hiding within the context…
Like some perverse contest…

Turned from words of excitement…
Into crushing, soul sapping disappointment…

Forming pools of simmering anger…
And double edged words of danger…
Speaking the language of a stranger…

Getting lost in translation…
But a verbal form of castration…
And a blunt accusation…

Pointing the finger…
Outlining the sinner…

And the deeds…
That grew from forbidden seeds…
But no one else sees…

Except the one…
Now holding the gun…

Firing bullets that wound…
With a hate that consumed…
And an ignorance that presumed…

The worst…
In spite of the curse…
Not asking first…

Just verbal violence…
That brings on a need for silence…
And dreams of a desert island…

With pure isolation…
A chance to avoid confrontation…
And certain mental disintegration…

Whilst stripping out all courage…
And leaving just the wreckage…
All caused by the secret message…

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6 responses to ““A flowing river of illusion, running with confusion”…

  1. Hi J,

    You know I always sit on things a bit before commenting. After reading this piece I realized I head a different voice from you. It made me smile, since it mimicked the title, “A flowing river of illusion, running with confusion”.

    I really, really like the approach you used in this piece. I realize that it does not work for every effort, but for this one, it’s perfect. It has a sense of whimsy in spite of the darkness, and a free flow of clever ideas, and a lot of wordplay and metaphors, much like a stream-of-consciousness. I like that, and let’s not joke, it’s not as easy to do as one thinks (and still requires control, maybe just a different type). I like the random length of the verses with no apparent patterns established. I love that it is generic, no, he or she, more general and less specific to the individual, allowing the reader to fill in the blanks, but still conveys a very powerful message.

    How do you feel about it? Do you like it as much as I do? It’s good shake things up a bit, ha-ha coming from a type-A personality. I think it’s really great work, and a wonderful poem.

    Have a great Thursday,
    Pepper

    • Thanks Pepper, an experimentation of sorts, I have written this way before on a couple of occasions and yes, I like it – but unlike most of my work, the words came before the song, so there was more to this one than meets the EYE 😉 – Cheers J

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