“Write down “I am OK”, a hundred times the doctors say”…

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I search in the darkness, for a sign…
At the same time, I pretend I’m fine…
Missing the point, then crossing the line…
Never expressing, what’s deep inside…
Or letting them see, when Eye cried…
The mistakes I make and the times I lied…
One day, I may finally understand…
Keeping an eye, on the hourglasses sand…
As I lose my sanity, strand by strand…
Yearning to leave, this no man’s land…

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17 responses to ““Write down “I am OK”, a hundred times the doctors say”…

    • Thank you – the song does all the hard work again, I have wanted to use it for ages, but was never sure how as the actual title doesn’t lend itself for a true acrostic – this is a halfway house! But *hugs* always accepted! Cheers J

  1. Since you always refer to songs, I am wondering if this one is for My Chemical Romance’s I’m Not Okay. My son covers that song with two different bands that he plays with so it’s in heavy rotation in my house. (Or does the title refer to another song I don’t know?)

    • Thanks Marissa – I wasn’t familiar with that song, but I listened on youtube – it would work too, but this one was written with the Eels – Electro Shock Blues in mind – there are a couple of lines about claiming the person is OK, before honesty rises and actually, they are not OK – I just used that line for the acrostic – I AM NOT OKAY – the song is haunting (hope you can play the Youtube clip?) and I have been wanting to use it for a while, but not figured out how! Cheers J

  2. Hi J,

    I usually comment after I have had a chance to ruminate a while over the words. My thoughts are most always captured in images (sometimes sounds or smells) I know weird, huh? Then I do my best to translate those pictures, sounds and smells into a language that can be understood. I’m not always successful. English, I think lacks so many words or rather a variety of words to describe the subtleties of emotions and feelings that a human can experience.

    I am always okay, I am never okay, which equals “I AM NOT OKAY”, you can’t see my face, but I am smiling. Every single line of your poem, could tell you something about me, but in some very strange way, I think you already know. The very first line, “I search in the darkness, for a sign…”, do you believe in signs? If so, then we can move forward, especially since you said I couldn’t horrify you.

    It’s such an enlightening piece, for such a dark piece, most like a mirror. I’m wondering how you got inside my head. You will have to share your secrets with me, but maybe, I already know.

    The poem is beautiful in its totality and beautiful line by line.

    Please take care,
    Pepper

    P.S. Dorian Gray, I’m smiling, you are so clever!

    • Hi Pepper – thanks again for taking the time to comment in detail – if I am honest, I am not sure what I believe in, but I am open to anything – somethings I don’t buy into – coincidence, religion or the supernatural for example, but that doesn’t prevent me from keeping an open mind whilst remaining detached – I feel that the best way for me to operate! But no, you would struggle to horrify me still – and yes, thanks for picking up on the Dorian Gray reference – it is such an amazing read – thanks for your kind words – Cheers J

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