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On a vapour trail…
She travels the skies…
In search of that something…
Which will light up her eyes…
Like a dance with a man…
Wearing black Cuban heels…
Who will enchant her soul…
And make her feel…
Like a woman who can fly…
Soaring so high above…
As she dances with angels…
And white feathered doves…
Leaving far behind her…
All that is mundane…
Her suburban lifestyle…
That drives her insane…
Leaving her searching…
For forbidden and fun action…
And finding it in places…
Of such sinful distraction…
Like the bottom of a glass…
Which led her to the top…
Stroking her damaged ego…
Now she never wants it to stop…
As she wants this feeling…
To become never ending…
Feeding off life’s highs…
And never fucking descending…
Because all that is waiting…
If she returns down below…
Is a normal existence…
Like all the others know…
But she’s had a taste…
Of other worldly things…
And been infected by the poison…
That only temptation brings…
Now drunk on sin’s vapour…
She travels the skies…
In search of a something…
That puts diamond dust in her eyes…
So sad…
So true…
So Blue…
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Song request by Dawn – read more of her work here : http://iblogstr8sicit.wordpress.com/
The truth shines like the SUN ,,,,always
Indeed it does – thanks for stopping by to comment – Cheers J
Hauntingly beautiful x
Thank you M’lady – safe travels 😉 – Cheers J
Reminds me what , George Carlin said once. Though picturesque 🙂
The comedian? Tell me more! Cheers J
… and peace in her heart … 🙂
Maybe yes, maybe no – but a nice thought! Cheers J
🙂
Wonderful
Thank you for stopping by to comment – Cheers J
What process led you to use the elipses like that? I really like the conceit and the diction of the poem, but I’m not really getting the structure as far as punctuation is concerned.
Honestly, when I started, I just liked how it looked on the page without really worrying about punctuation. Along with many things about the written word, it was never my strong point – over time I have looked at my punctuation and how I present my words and there are examples where I have tried, but I thought, in all honesty, no one really cares and I still like the look of it, so to heck with it – Once I become a well known and paid writer, I promise to rectify 😉 Until then, I hope that doesn’t offend and you will continue to read! Thanks for stopping by to comment – Cheers J
yeah, no problem. I was just curious. Doesn’t bother me at all, because the words are still deliberate. 🙂 Mark of a poet: caring about the words above all else.
Great poetry,and a tast freaky, dark, and over the edges of the norm. Yay! It’s bitchen! Groovy! And a slant of kewl! Punctuation is a conformist tools and of course for fools! Break the rules as shattered glass, art has no boundaries just creativity, and that will last! You passed! A+ + + A+ + +
I may be reading between the lines and going out on a limb, but I think you like and approve 😉 – thank you for such kind words! Cheers J
My pleasure (exclamation point)¡¡¡
So sad, so true, so blue… So beautiful!!!
Thanks – that last line was actually a comment left by Dawn, so I had to work it into the poem somewhere! Cheers J
Haunting, beautiful and completely fabulous
Thanks again Sal, Always appreciated and never taken for granted – Cheers J